100% mine # 2

[Vafann]

Is this better or worse?

[Vafann]

Oops, this wasn´t meant to be a new thread, I´m tired.

[Hoogle]

nicer well done

[Zeealex]

XD looks great Vafann some of the flowers glow-ey bit is obscuring the magpie a little, got to love my technicality XD :P

[Vafann]

nicer well done

Ok, thank you Hoogle, yes I think it´s better with less also.

[Vafann]

XD looks great Vafann some of the flowers glow-ey bit is obscuring the magpie a little, got to love my technicality XD :P

Thank you Zeealex, yes you are right, I will try to fix that too!

[dv8_fx]

This looks cleaner than the first. But I like both. Keep it up....

[Vafann]

This looks cleaner than the first. But I like both. Keep it up....

Thank you Dv8! I will try

[createpersuasion]

New here, but thought I'd stop by and say great work. I personally like the other one better, this one feels too forced and loses the kind of hazy air that made it more fascinating to me, it also loses some of its ambiance provided for the viewer. I was in an old room dimly lit by incandescent bulbs before, now I'm looking at an album cover...just my thoughts. amazing work either way, totally know what's it like to wish you could see something without the hours of staring at effecting your understanding of the image.

[ibclare]

Well heck, what's one opinion without, you know, 5 or 6 more? LOL

I like both. I don't see the album cover thing, though it is a bit more harsh without the wispy white, so I can see Create's point.
IMO: I think those wisps (don't try to say that) helped to tie things together except they were too hazy and obstructing in the center. I'd like to see a little of it back. I like that the woman in green was not immediately noticeable and that much obstructing seemed good. I agree with Zeealax about the glow; it does obscure the magpie and I don't think it works. But this a fantasy of course. I also think it is just a wee bit busy and out of balance, too heavy on the left. The right side is just right. The only other thing is, my eye jumps to the catface. I like it, but I think it is over-emphasized.

Well, here is something I know from my proofreading experience, having learned it best editing my own writing. Close your eyes, oh no this is an image. Open your eyes. NM. Sometimes you have to be ruthless and cut favorite things -- phrases, sentences, words -- from your composition for the sake of clarity, to prevent verbosity and not bore your reader to death, or to fit some requirements (which you don't have). It's hard, but once you bite the bullet and do it, the reward is clear.

So I'm just suggesting you take out an element or two, just little things. But don't get me wrong, overall I really love it. I do. You're great. Cheers, Clare