"One Step Behind the Sun". Please enjoy my comic book!

[Oh for Chrissake!]

Hello folks,

Please click here for ---> "One Step Behind the Sun." A short illustrated story featuring an otherworldy nomadic tribe abandoned by their God.





Thank you for taking a look, and I welcome your feedback.


Jesse Greene

 

[lemorris]

interesting

I'm not gonna pretend to be smart enough to get it all.

Illustration wise it's pretty cool. I like the simplicity and I thought the expressions and overall linework was good. The sun being so sharply inked through me for a bit of a loop...it didn't seem to belong, but the rest was consistent.

The pages with no text kinda took me out of the story, but still it was pretty cool.